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    The Apple
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    I
    p
    i
    c
    k
    e
    d

    An Apple.
    The shiny sphere
    shimmered in the delicate
    sunlight, and the leaves wafted
    in the Monstrous breeze. i asked the
    Apple, Why is your Skin so beautiful,
    But your core is not? The apple Just shined
    in the breeze, not answering. I too, was hurt
    I dropped the apple, it rolled into the soil, but
    when I picked it back up, it's outside was still
    beautiful. So i asked it, Why do you persist
    to be strong?I hurt you, you fell, but you
    stay strong. Why is that? The apple still
    said nothing. I sighed, and threw the
    apple across the garden, where
    it landed in a pile of mud. I
    smirked, figures. It's
    ugly now. But the
    ​Thing that i didn't know was that the apple, it's self could be washed off, and cleaned, it's skin once again, beautiful. That day, I learned something. I learned that No matter how Hurt I am on the inside, I have to stay myself on the outside. And that, that little apple made all the difference. And to this day, I still think about that apple, and how it saved me.
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    Bumpyyyyyy

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    buummpyy
    no one likes it?

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    Oh my god! Did you make it up by yourself? It's awesome!




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    Yeah, i did. I <3 poetry, especially concrete poetry.
    And that is actually a true story. :3

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    bumpy...:3

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    What a lovely piece of writing, well done

    The only thing is, it didn't seem like too much of a poem, even though I liked it. Maybe making it more "piece-y" instead of very "sentence-y". Rofl i don't know what I am trying to say, that probably didn't make sense.
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    ~ignore this post. :3

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