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    Default My stroy: Magic life

    Magic life
    A lost life and a new beginning
    Once opon a time there was a girl named kaya, her family died and she lived with her grandmother, yet she kept a neckless her mother gave her..she always said that i was magical...but i never belived her....but there was one day...when her life changed...forever
    Grandma: "Time for bed!"
    Kaya: "Yes ma'm"
    I Went to bed and when the sun showed up i saw my grandmother...dead.
    i cried and ran away...thats were i bumb to a boy with gold hair and brown eyes and a gold tan
    "Oh i'm srry!" i said
    "Its ok" said the boy
    "Hi mine name is kaya"
    "Hi...i'm Travis"
    "Nice meeting you travis...so you ran away too?"
    "Yea...hungry?" said Travis
    My tummy growled like a wolf
    "Ya thanks" i smiled hoping i won't screw THIS up..
    We went to a house or tent i should say...travis knocked at the tent door...
    "who is it??" Said a voice
    "Its me Travis...i meet a new friend!"
    A boy opens the door..he has black hair...emblamed eyes...and a gold tan
    "Umm hi...i'm Jack"
    "I'm kaya nice meeting you"
    We sat down for dinner
    "So...why did you ran away guys?" i asked
    " I was going to ask you the same thing! well i ran away because my family was shot by terroists" they both said at the same time
    i giggled...
    " I ran away because my parents and grandmother AND grandfather died because someone shot them"
    Then that smile ran away from my face
    To be contunied
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    Default Re: My stroy: Magic life

    wow great story soooooo dramtic!!!!!!!!!!!xD amaZing
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    Default Re: My stroy: Magic life

    I decided to edit it for you since I am bored xD

    Magic life
    A lost life and a new beginning
    Here is a story tthat starts with a girl named Kaya, her family died and she lived with her grandmother, yet she kept a neckless her mother gave her. Her mother always said that it was magical...but i never belived her. But one day...when her life changed...forever
    Grandma: "Time for bed!"
    Kaya: "Yes ma'm!"
    I Went to bed and when the sun was peeking into the curtains on my window, I saw my grandmother...dead.
    I cried and bolted out of the house running as far as i could...that's where I bumped into a boy with gold hair and brown eyes. "Oh dear! I am so sorry!" I apologized.
    "It's ok" the boy replied

    "Hi my name is Kaya"
    "Hi, I'm Travis"
    "Nice meeting you Travis...so you ran away too?"
    "Yea... are you hungry?" asked Travis
    My tummy growled like a wolf
    "Yeah I guess, thanks" I smiled hoping I won't screw THIS up.
    We went to a house or tent I should say...Travis knocked at the tent flaps

    "Who is it?" Questioned a voice
    "It's me Travis...I met a new friend!"
    A boy opens the door..he has black hair and emerald

    "Umm hi...I'm Jack"
    "I'm kaya nice to meet you"
    We sat down for dinner
    "So...why did you run away guys?" I asked
    " I was going to ask you the same thing! well I ran away because my family was shot by terroists" they both said at the same time
    I giggled...
    " I ran away because my parents and grandmother AND grandfather died because someone shot them"
    Then that smile ran away from my face
    To be continued...


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    Default Re: My stroy: Magic life

    lol amazing!!!!!
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