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    Jack Frost


    Chapter 1


    As usual I'll tell my story. You all may have heard i am a snow myth, But this is the true story.


    My black hair flew gently threw the snowy air. My tan skin was cold and had snow flakes on them. I got off the porch and saw my dad. It was 2011 and i was 15.

    "Jack... JACK FROST!!!" My dad hollered. "Get in here and eat your dinner!" Dad hollered louder.

    I then ran inside and took my beanie, mittins, coat, scarf, and boots off. I sat down at the table and ate. Then larger winds came. It was new years eve we all were ready but didn't know how long this snowy blizzard day lasted.

    (At least 2 post and 2nd will come)
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    No one posting soooo

    Chapter 2



    When i woke up my bed was freezing and the heater was up. I looked in the mirror and my DARK blue eyes weren't dark they were light blue.I scratched my head and looked at my skin. I was a bit paler but not too light. My hair was the same black. I felt like i might be ill.

    "Mom!" I hollered. "yes" She replied. I then hollered back walking out the door dizzy from confusion, "Take....my---tempertur--e..." My mom ran up with a themometer and put it in my mouth. "Honey it's 53 degrees should we take him to a doctor..." mom said to my dad as i blinked my eyes. I looked at my skin that was getting paler. I scratched my head and when i let go of my hair white snow was in my hand.

    At the time i felt crazy but that storm did something to me. Something dangerous.

    I took the hot wash cloth off and it froze right as i touched it. I looked around and found a mirror. I looked in the mirror as i walked towards it. My hair was black my skin pale and eyes pale blue. "Uhh not good not good at all..." I said. "JACK!!! Come on down heres a doctor..." mom said.

    I hate doctors but now i hated them even more the ones who cared for colds. I didn't know what was going on with my mind at the time. I halfway down the steps and saw the neetle and hot stuff.

    (Till next time)
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    Cool story, Jack


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    Quote Originally Posted by rechase2 View Post
    Cool story, Jack
    Thinks i just need more people to post

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    Quote Originally Posted by Overlord Joshua View Post
    Thinks i just need more people to post


    Puntuation.

    I think that is how you spell it?

    Other then that,pretty good.
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    Quote Originally Posted by chase123456tan View Post
    Puntuation.

    I think that is how you spell it?

    Other then that,pretty good.
    Punctuation u mean?
    and no one cares COUGH COUGH i need one more post a good not commenting on my comment type of comment...

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    ANNOUCMENT MY READERS: I may make another holiday season book if this ends earlier then i thought... My new book is holiday ish and has 2 new main characters i may mske a 3rd but the two are: Joshua and Dylan Firetear

    Any ideas may go on my story idea thread that i will make soon...

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    Don't be so rude Josh. I can tell you I am strict with punctuation, spelling, etc.

    But I may say that maybe you could write/type more descriptive sentences or paragraphs? For some reason it isn't really catching my interest but I may help out making it more interesting. Come up with an interesting plot, describe the characters. Right now I'm like lost of what going on. From what I read Jack Frost had caught a cold or something and now he isn't his usual self?

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    Quote Originally Posted by Ciana Winterblossom View Post
    Don't be so rude Josh. I can tell you I am strict with punctuation, spelling, etc.

    But I may say that maybe you could write/type more descriptive sentences or paragraphs? For some reason it isn't really catching my interest but I may help out making it more interesting. Come up with an interesting plot, describe the characters. Right now I'm like lost of what going on. From what I read Jack Frost had caught a cold or something and now he isn't his usual self?
    Gah... um Chase ment Puncutation in the sentence i wrote and read it all thurly....

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    Quote Originally Posted by Overlord Joshua View Post
    Punctuation u mean?
    and no one cares COUGH COUGH i need one more post a good not commenting on my comment type of comment...

    I'm somewhat laughing at this.

    You help somebody,they yell at you,then you correct them about helping a person.
    I can't help but smile.

    And thank you.
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